By: Christian Williams
Everyone loves chocolate right? Well at least a large amount of people do. However this delicious snack that can come in many different forms and flavors has many health benefits, this however does'nt mean to go crazy and eat too much. According to "health benefits of chocolate" chocolate "contains antioxidants called flavonoids, as well as some magnesium. These nutrients may help lower blood pressure and reduce your risk of heart disease and stroke."After reading that i appreciate this snack much more than before because this might be able to save your life one day. the author Joy Bauer then says that dark chocolate is the most nutritiousof them all. Although dark chocolate is not as appealing as milk chocolate you should try and include it into your diet.
http://www.joybauer.com/food-articles/chocolate/
ReplyDeleteI thought that this article was very informative. The grammar could be improved. The article could also be longer since it is very short. You also need to add more facts and perhaps the feelings people have toward chocolate
ReplyDeletearticle is simple and to the point. However I believe that it would be efficient to create a second paragraph that describes the health benefits in detail. You could add a bar graph comparing dark chocolate to other types of chocolate to prove your point.
ReplyDeleteI like that you included a rhetorical question at the start. It makes the article feel more personal. I eat dark chocolate frequently, so it was exciting to learn about the health benefits it provides. However, the article could be improved. More information should be provided and changing up the order of the sentences will allow the article to have better flow.
ReplyDelete- Muhammad Abuzar